| Writing an Effective College
Entrance Essay
You’d think the most difficult parts
of college would be the papers, exams and finals
that come after you’ve been accepted
somewhere, but for many students that is not
the case. The application essay—because
it determines exactly where you will be writing
papers and taking exams and finals for the
next few years—can be a far more daunting
task.
While it helps to keep in mind that life will
go on, great entrance essay or not, don’t
make the mistake some prospective college students
do and take the essay portion of your application
too lightly. Over one-third of the time an
admissions advisor spends on your application
is spent on your essay(s). It is the single
best chance you have to attach a personality
to your GPA and test scores and to differentiate
yourself from thousands of other applicants.
Why be merely John/Jane Doe when you can be
someone who showed us in her essay that she
is adventurous; has great leadership potential;
is original, curious and kind; and is absolutely
perfect for our school?
Follow these tips to writing the best college
entrance essay you can.
Recognize the
importance of the essay. Your
college entrance essays serve two purposes:
to convince the admissions advisor you are
original and worthy of admission and to show
them you are more than a GPA or test score.
Keep these in mind with every sentence you
write.
Brainstorm for
subject matter. Whether the
school you are applying to asks you broadly
for a “personal statement” or has
a very specific question for you to answer
(e.g., “What are you most proud of in
your life?”), you will find yourself
with dozens of different experiences and events
to choose from. One of the best ways to identify
and then narrow down your choices is by brainstorming.
Questions to get you started include: Does
any quality distinguish you from everyone else?
Have you ever worked very hard for something
and succeeded? And failed? How did you react?
Has anyone or anything heavily influenced your
life? What is your strongest personality trait?
What are your most important extracurricular
activities and why? How did you get involved
with them? Where do you see yourself in the
future?
The main thing you are looking for when considering
subject matter is an idea you feel passionate
about. Don’t write about an extracurricular
activity because that’s what you think
a college wants to hear; write about it because
in doing so your enthusiasm, personality and
originality will shine though. Ninety percent
of college entrance essays are boring. Writing
about something you have a passion for is the
best way to ensure your essay doesn’t
fall into that category.
Answer the question. You don’t want
to be passionate at the expense of the answering
the question, however. If you’re asked
to write about topic X, write about topic X,
even if you’re more interested in topic
Y. No college wants students who can’t
answer a simple question. To make sure you’re
on target, read through your finished essay,
asking yourself at the end of each and every
sentence, “How does this statement help
answer the question?”
Use the introduction
to create mystery or intrigue. Admissions advisors have to read
hundreds—possibly thousands—of
essays. Expect them to spend a minute or two
on your essay…unless they have a compelling
reason to read rather than skim. Use your introduction
to grab their attention from the beginning.
Don’t answer the essay question in the
first sentence; but rather create suspense
that forces the admissions advisors to read
on.
Be yourself. Most likely, whatever experience
you choose to write about has been shared by
others. What will make your essay unique are
your thoughts and feelings during that experience.
Focus on those.
Use active rather
than passive voice. Passive-voice
expressions are ones in which something is
being done to the subject rather than the subject
being the one to take action. Sentences written
in the passive voice are usually uninteresting
and flat. Nearly any sentence initially written
in the passive voice can be rewritten in the
active.
Before: The statewide writing content’s
award-winning essay was the one I wrote.
After: I wrote an award-winning essay for
a statewide writing contest.
Stay away from the thesaurus. While it is
certainly tempting to rush for the thesaurus
for some big, intelligent-sounding words, don’t.
College admissions advisors want to get to
know you, not Roget. Besides, chances are high
you’re going to misuse the new, fancy
words (sorry, but that’s the truth).
And even if you do manage to use them correctly,
too many big words are going to make the essay
sound contrived.
Show, don’t tell. Rather than merely
asserting you have a particular quality, use
a detailed example that showcases it.
Before: I learned patience and kindness while
volunteering at a nursing home.
After: At first, Mrs. Ellis’ tantrums
and yelling made me angry, but after a
few weeks, I realized she just wanted someone
to
spend time with her. As soon as we started
watching reruns of The Cosby Show every
night, she, and her roommates, were much
happier.
Have
others proofread your essay. No matter
how many times you reread your essay, it’s
still only one pair of eyes looking at it.
And as far as essays go, the more people who
look at it the better. Have friends and family
read it over, looking not only for spelling
or grammatical mistakes, but also making sure
you answered the question asked, have an engaging
introduction, use active-voice verbs, don’t
repeat yourself, haven’t left anything
unclear, and have used every single sentence
to your advantage. It may also help to ask
your proofreaders what the essay shows them
about your personality. You may think you’re
coming across as original and open-minded when,
in fact, others reading it see pride and conceit.
Good luck! |